The FLY in the SOUP

This is probably my best-ever poem. I need to add that it was written in 1992, when it emerged word-perfect directly from a dream, and I have spent more than 100 hours trying to improve it but without success.


This is probably my best-ever poem. I need to add that it was written in 1992, when it emerged word-perfect directly from a dream, and I have spent more than 100 hours trying to improve it but without success.
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   Julie  From IL, USA
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What a splendid poem, Rayray! And on such short notice! It (and you, oh Poet Laureate of Sudokuland) are awe-inspiring!
15/Feb/08 4:24 PM
   Eve  From So. Oregon
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The question we all have - what is life about - why are we here and what is next All we have is a faith that each of us has chosen, or refuse to choose at all. But, we all question, at one time or another our belief system. Why? Why do we question? should we question? - or just submit ourselves to faith and justification?
15/Feb/08 4:31 PM
   Amelia  From Robinvale Aust    Supporting Member
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I enjoyed your poem RayRay and I agree with Eve we all ask that question at some point in our lives.
15/Feb/08 9:52 PM
   Kathy  From Valrico, Florida, USA    Supporting Member
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"Ours is not to reason why,
ours is but to do and die"
Alfred Lord Tennyson wondered, too.
You're in good company Rayray.
16/Feb/08 2:35 AM
Judy  From San Diego
A lovely and thought-provoking poem, Rayray. Thanks for pointing it out to me.

My faith is strong ... I wish you were more confident in yours. XO
16/Feb/08 3:48 AM
   Dorthea  From San Francisco    Supporting Member
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Love you and the fly
03/Mar/08 8:19 AM
   Jane  From St. Simons Island, GA
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Rayray - I agree. This is absolutely your best ever poem. I don't think there's a man alive who hasn't at some point questioned his faith. I also don't think anyone has questioned it more eloquently than you have. Kudos!
20/Mar/08 6:57 AM
   Vibrant Vici  From California    Supporting Member
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Rayray - I'm so glad you directed me to this poem. Superb! Had me giggling throughout!
I love that it came to you in a dream...and I am not surprised that you are unable to improve on it in your waking state. Knowing this, can you still have the doubts that you expressed at the end of the poem???...for this one is truly divine!
13/Sep/08 5:37 AM
   Kathy  From Maryland/USA    Supporting Member
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The age old question....
This is so well done, Ray!
02/Aug/09 12:21 PM
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